Favoring the Good Leg

I’m fessing up:  I’m off prompt this week, for Read Write Poem’s celebrity prompt. However, I have a really good excuse. 

Earlier this week, I wrote a post where I used the phrase:  “favoring the good leg.” In the comments, Dana from Read Write Poem suggested that I write a poem using that phrase as the title.  Never one to back down from a challenge, I began thinking about what this phrase really means.  And the following poem draft resulted.

Favoring the Good Leg

I treat her like the good daughter, leaning
on her with all my weight.  I know
she can bear me, she
who bends without breaking
and patiently assumes
more than her share.  Sure,

she whines when I climb stairs and she burns
with exertion at every extra step,
but each day she grows thicker
and stronger. She hardens

under my added pressure.  I know
her sibling is suffering, know
it shrivels daily beneath
my lowered expectations.  I watch

their transformations together. 
These twins, they trade weight,
heavy and light, in uneven
shuffles.  They limp and stomp.

With each tremble and lock step,
they whisper to me, in unison:

Here is how you invite
our atrophy and waste.

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12 Comments to “Favoring the Good Leg”

  1. Oh yays! You wrote Favoring the Good Leg. I am so happy to see this poem in the world. I love your first line as a way into the extended metaphor. I like this very much paired with the found poem you shared a couple of days ago over in the Found Poetry group at Read Write Poem that Nathan runs.

    I see a chapbook by this title!

  2. This is a draft? There are times I wish my finished pieces had this much shine and polish…

    The perspective, and the late breaking curve ball at the end…good job.

  3. This is wonderful. Loved the title!

    chemical analysis of a poet

  4. I really like this one.

  5. this

    “assumes
    more than her share”

    isn’t only great for a poem with this title/subject, but also a good theme to explore more. it really appeals to me!

  6. I like how the poem moves from confession to revelation. The last stanza is even chilling.

    Yeah, I like the theme, too. And book title.

    And your header! (I’ve been reading in Reader and that’s the problem with Reader. You don’t get to see the prettiness!!)

  7. (I wish my avatar was my gravitar. Maybe one of the tech-angels will help me.)

  8. Simply fantastic, Jessica. Your use of line breaks is incredible and that ending blows me away.

  9. great one….the title really attracted me

  10. Found you through RWP. This is really wonderful!

  11. I love this, the whole metaphor of ‘the good daughter’ works very well.

  12. a mother’s love is so complex…each child different…with different expectations one to another…opening a window into the twins aspect…loved the “good” leg detail…

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